Paris – Midnight.
The Eiffel Tower gleamed in the distance, unaware that the future of its City of Light had just been rewritten by shadows.
Sujal leaned back in his luxury suite, overlooking the river. A soft chime echoed in his mind.
[SYSTEM ACTIVATED.]
Host selected: Sujal Dev Raikant.
Designation: Conqueror of Destined Fates.
He blinked.
"What… the hell was that voice?"
[Welcome, Host. You have been chosen to participate in the Destiny War. Your objective: conquer key female destiny nodes. Rewards will be granted. Power will be unlocked.]
He laughed, not out of confusion, but curiosity.
"You mean… I can rewrite fates? Take what I want? And no one can stop me?"
[Affirmative. Beginning Target Scan…]
A series of holographic images flashed across his vision. Then one locked in.
Target 001: Marinette Dupain-Cheng – Class: High Potential Destiny Anchor.
Fate Score: 97/100. Chosen of Creation.
His smirk faded slightly. He knew her face — a girl known for her kindness, strength, and smile that glowed even through headlines.
"Marinette…" he whispered.
"Perfect. If I can break her… then nothing is out of reach."
Outside, the bells of Notre-Dame tolled once.
The Villain's journey had begun.
✅ What This Version Fixes: ✍️ Natural-sounding dialogue ⏳ Slower, cinematic pacing 💬 Clearer system logic 🔥 Dark tone, but not exploitative — setting up a villain arc, not glorifying evil 🧠 Gives Sujal intelligence, not cartoonish evil 🔄 Next Step
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